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[naodrith]

Am not caught up on novel work. Have excuse. Alysa's boyfriend Frenched me. You may all ponder that while I wait for Pyrae to come home so I can tell her.

The party? Umm...there was Silly String. And we played I've Never. And, um, I dressed up as a vampire cat, which would so totally be my Hallowe'en costume this year if I hadn't somehow lost the ears.

No, we didn't get drunk or stoned. Why are you lookin' at me funny?

Quote:

Alysa: You cheated on me!
Tony: You told me to!

Now for the FUN bit, whining about my novel.

I hate my first chapter.

You see, most of it takes place four years before the main action begins. And it's boring. (Well, I think so. Apparently everyone else finds it addictive. ???) But I can't get rid of it, because it contains a lot of exposition that I can't work in anywhere else and which is completely necessary to understand the whole damn book.

PLUS, it's all about Lasa, the main character whom I despise. Which is bad. And I would totally do away with her, but she's necessary. She's a bloody plot device. And, well, it would require way too much work and changing things to fix it, if that makes any sense at all, and would also twist things all around and basically require another total rewrite, except more drastic. So, what eventually happens is that I totally ignore her in favor of My Darlings, the main characters whom I would totally snog if they were real. And that's also bad, because in the first draft it resulted in a very anti-climactic end to her subplot. Which was originally the main plot.

So, really, my entire plot is all screwed up and my only solace is that somehow, people still like it.

I don't understand!

Well, I'm going to go finish typing up chapter one, and then you can all read it and have some idea what I'm talking about.

Comments

[lyra-vega-05.livejournal.com]

I agree with you.

I feel somehow your love for the other character(s) has gotten in the way of the main plot. It would be nicer to change everything and have it to revolve around them but that would mean changing almost everyhing, pretty much. It would help if you minimized everything.

Not to say get rid of anyone but to just downsize their importance, like you did to Quinn and her father.

It might sound odd the advice I am about to give you but it did come from my mouth, or raher my head, but anyway here it goes.

You should cut most of chapter one and make it a prologue and start form there. You seem to have a real knack(?) for writing them, Yes you do.

You could start it already there and them leaving.

Now if you don't like it do not, I repeat, Do Not take it out on me. Mostly because you kept complaining that I would comment and the many arguments that Lj wouldn't let me.

So what you will with this. Oh, andhopefully you recorded stargate for our dear friend kristen because I didn't. I said you could do it.

[naodrith.livejournal.com]

I would take your advice, but for two things.

1) Prologues are a thing of the devil and to be avoided where possible.

2) Prologues must never exceed eight pages, double-spaced; this one would be about twelve. BAD.

[lyra-vega-05.livejournal.com]

That is why you must pick and chose. You could pick the going to his house scene and the leaving scene, nix does almost that same thing in his Mister Monday.